a feeling you can’t even

by Erin
Written June 16, 2007

SPOT! on target mister
we’ve got this!under control
our energy contained in this!
system spontaneous system
releasing this!expression in
these killer jewels per mole
of words a feeling you
can’t even FATHOM unless
you’re one of us\373 kelvins
boil the water but the butterflies
never stop fluttering

a mole of words per hour and
SPOT!1 x 10 to the 23rd power

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  1. Six Point Oh Two, or 6.02. The first instance is just “spot” in all capital letters. []

2 thoughts on “a feeling you can’t even

  1. Interesting. This reminds me of Tom Wolfe’s rhetorical style in The Electric Kool-Aid Acid Test.

    What’s the purpose of this, especially with the backslashes and exclamations after every “this!”?

  2. Hm, I have not read The Electric Kool-Aid Acid Test, but perhaps I will check it out in the future.

    The exclamation points after “this” are there because the thought could actually end right there (like you might say, “We’ve got this!” if you feel confident about something/have it under control), but the words following kind of explain what “this” refers to instead of ending it right there. (We’ve got this under control, we’re releasing this expression, our energy is contained in this system.)

    I put the backslashes there because, when I was writing it, no conventional punctuation felt appropriate there. I tend to think of them like a speed bump – you have to slow down there, take a breath. In my head, I read everything before the backslashes rather quickly, breathe, and then read the rest calmly.

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